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Lancer
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Posted: Mon, 09/11/2015 16:44 (8 Years ago)
I'm curious, anyone else doing nanorimo?
Dragonsoul
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Posted: Mon, 09/11/2015 21:01 (8 Years ago)
I wanted to, but I did it last month. Timing is a disability of mine. >.<
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Posted: Mon, 09/11/2015 23:58 (8 Years ago)
I was going to do it with one of my real life friends, but she said that she wanted to back out because she wants to do writing commissions instead, so I'm stuck trying to do 20k for my fanfiction instead to replace it (though the progress for that project is going really well).

Dragonsoul
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Posted: Tue, 24/11/2015 23:57 (8 Years ago)
Le prompt of le bread...
(I think I mixed up the order of how you actually make bread... X3)
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Urgh... I think I am going to be sick. All the baker has been doing for about five minutes is roll, squish back up, and roll me out again. My perfect slim bread body is getting... bigger.
Well, I guess not bigger, but you get the horrible, horrible picture.
Finally, after about another century of spinning, he was satisfied. He sprinkled flour all over me, and the kneaded me. Kneading is different from rolling, it feels like a very aggressive (or ecstatic!) masseuse.
Too bad it didn't last forever. He plopped me on to a freezing cold pan, then put me in a freaking over. Cold or hot? MAKE UP YOUR MIND! I didn't really mind though, I was getting an awesome tan.
So, he pulled me out and I was all beautiful, golden and toasty warm. He put me into a glass case so I could show off the other, lamer bread. But this old lady waltzed in and bought me. BOUGHT ME!
So, she stuffed me into this really smelly bag and jumped on to something that felt like a horse. It bumped. A lot.
She threw the bag somewhere and then ran away somewhere. I dunno where, I couldn't see through the bag.
After a day or two, she came back and began to eat me. I'm just going to stop there.

Wanted to bring this back! It was a lot of fun :3
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Leveia
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Posted: Fri, 27/11/2015 04:40 (8 Years ago)
Nah, I don't think you mixed up the process; it sounds accurate to me. Also, it really does sound interesting: how bread feels about kneading, being put into an oven, although it would have been nice to see how this could have continued.

That aside, I've written a new story called Time and Tide. Could I trouble you guys to leave a review about the quality or the plot? Anything really, I just want constructive criticism so I can improve.
Comfygazing
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Posted: Fri, 27/11/2015 05:49 (8 Years ago)
well, I'm working on a short story called Saturday Night Fright. It was originally for Halloween, but it dubs as a spooky story. it's a digimon fan fiction and it follows my make belief digidestined, Luna, general of team Nightgaze.

Here's what I have so far
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Saturday Night Fright

Sitting on a rock, 11 year old Luna cast her fishing line again, looking at the vast ocean that covered the Island Zone, inside the Digital World. Sighing, she felt a small tug on her line, and she stared at it, wondering if it was a fragment of her imagination. Suddenly, Luna was pulled underwater, and she desperately tired to fight the strong undercurrent, before two paws grabbed her waist and dragged her up to the surface. Breaking the surface, Luna gasped for air and started swimming towards the shore, looking behind her to see her partner Digimon, Lekismon follow her. Crawling onto dry ground, Luna sprawled on the grass, chest heaving. Lekismon flopped down beside her, his fur all damp and wet. “The hell was dat?” He asked, in his strong London accent. “I dunno.” Luna gasped. “But I saw a ghost like thing.” “Yer just delusional. Swallowed too much water I’d reckon.” Lekismon grunted, sitting up. “Common, let’s go get a fire going.” A few minutes later, the pair was sitting around a fire, drying off. Wearing only her red tank top and jeans, Luna sighed. “Tomorrow were heading to that old church we saw yesterday Kay? We’ve rested enough.” “Fine wid me, luvvie. You lead, I’d follow.”Lekismon replied, lying down on the ground. “Ah don’t know ‘bout ya, but I’m getting some shut eye, so g’night to y’all.” Smiling faintly, Luna also laid down. “Good night Lekkie.”

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Waking up, Luna squinted at the bright sun, and then at Lekismon, who was still sleeping, which was quite unusual. Lekismon was usually up earlier than her. Walking over to him, Luna gently lifted his ear and then yelled. “Wake Up Lekkie!” Lekismon’s gloved hand whacked Luna and Lekismon sat up, groaning. “Don’t have ta do dat, luvvie.” He muttered, standing up. Luna smirked. “Well, Mr. Sleepy Ears, while you were sprawled on the ground doing nothing, I went out and got us something to eat.” Producing a package wrapped, in leaves, Lekismon’s eyes lit up. “Well, what a jolly god moon you are. Ah think that I taught yeh some important life skills.” Grabbing the package, Lekismon unwrapped it and started munching the berries, chewing thoughtfully. “Hmm… night’s falling early.” Looking up at the Sky, Luna noticed that the sun was already setting. “No way.” She breathed. “The sun just rose like 5 minutes ago!” “Well, Ah think we’d better move to that church. Might be a tad safer there.” Lekismon grunted, dusting his paws. “Common Luvvie. We got a sermon to hear.” Snorting ruefully, Luna followed her digimon, glancing at the darkening sky. Noticing that Lekismon was way ahead of her, Luna scrambled to catch up with her partner.


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Dragonsoul
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Posted: Fri, 27/11/2015 13:09 (8 Years ago)
Thanks, Eeveeloution!
I haven't read the Percy Jackson series and I've never seen any digimon.... But I'll try to help with them, bit for now I need to go.
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Posted: Sat, 28/11/2015 07:59 (8 Years ago)
And while people are making stories, I'm trying to make refs for my 12 - 20 main characters who are always human-humanoid, when I have no skills whatsoever. //dies//

And I was going to do NaNoWriMo, but then I remembered I would fail my exams if I did it, because then I would focus only on NaNoWriMo and completely forget about school, since it's boring.

On another note, I have been working on this in my free time, and I need criticism. Loads and loads of it. (I need somewhere else to put it nyah...)
In fact, rip it to pieces with criticism if you want.


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Leveia
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Posted: Sat, 28/11/2015 10:07 (8 Years ago)
Okay, so I fixed grammatical errors and added a couple of suggestions, but I'm not that used to Google docs yet, so I'll have to put an edit in here, since I kinda mucked it up.

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"The High Council have literally banned everyone, Anastasia. Forget about Nevermind touching it, only several people are permitted to look at see it."


Bold are alternate words and strikethrough are words that should be cancelled.

That aside, though, I love it - intrigue, mystery and a rebellious female that has power and a snarky attitude to match. There's also a few alternatives you could use, but I've put those in the doc. Anyway, so far, so good. It doesn't reveal too much, but it reveals enough.

This is set in the LoTR universe, right? I can't really tell, but what with the mention of the Elves, that's my guess since I haven't read it yet.
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Posted: Sat, 28/11/2015 14:28 (8 Years ago)
@Eeveelution8:

Thanks for the help! It's greatly appreciated, believe me.

And no, it's not set in LotR, as much as I would like it to be, I think I'd end up making Anastasia a Mary Sue.

(Yeah, this is what happens when I write on my phone but sadly my laptop is STILL unable to use Wi-Fi...)

(Totally gonna give credit, do you have a DA, Tumblr, Wattpad or Quotev account I can use?)


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Leveia
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Posted: Sat, 28/11/2015 14:37 (8 Years ago)
You're welcome!

Wait, it's not set in LotR? Huh, I was sure that it was... oh well.

What credit? As in fixing the mistakes? No, it was just some simple work on my part; there's no need to give a whole production over it. In fact, if you want me to beta-read more chapters for you, shoot me a PM. I'll be glad to help with errors and give feedback.

True, I'm trying hard not to make my own OCs Mary Sues, because it's so tempting to give them the power to solve everything, but I know that I really shouldn't do that...

But if you insist, I'm SilverNight104 on Wattpad, Fanfiction.net and Inkitt (not original, I know.)
Dragonsoul
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Posted: Sat, 05/12/2015 21:14 (8 Years ago)
//le awkwardly bumps...
Lancer
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Posted: Thu, 24/03/2016 23:14 (8 Years ago)
Is this even alive anymore? XD
Dragonsoul
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Posted: Thu, 07/04/2016 19:21 (8 Years ago)
HI! I'm kinda alive!
Ufimtsev
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Posted: Tue, 26/04/2016 06:53 (8 Years ago)
ohmygosh oh my g o s h I'm so sorry
I'm alive, right now. Pretty sure NaNo prime ate my soul, and at the moment Camp NaNo's kicking my butt. I haven't had enough time for PH and I deeply regret not visiting more frequently than every other month but

aaaaaaaaaaaaaaaah hello fellow writer folk, I'm still cheerin' u on, you can write the things!



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Posted: Tue, 26/04/2016 07:12 (8 Years ago)
ahh, finally, a place where I think I can belong ;v;


Hey, I'm a writer!
Username: GOOM_LORD (used to be crepuscular)

What I am looking for here: critique and ideas, of course! (I may also give critique)

A sample of my Writing: I write in my many notebooks, but my latest writings are from roleplays on my advanced scribes account. my favourite roleplay right now is x
I reccomend this site to any literate roleplayers! here's a quick snippet of one of my posts;
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The cool autumn breeze drifted over the young blonde man, as his slow footsteps resounded against the pavement, echoing in the silent neighbourhood. The wind picked up suddenly, creating a whirl of leaves around the man's feet, smatterings of brown, red and orange colouring the dull pavement. He shifted slightly, picking out his lighter from inside his large, corduroy jacket pocket, and lighting the cigarette just hanging out of his mouth. Covering the butt with his trembling, numb hands, he eventually lit the cigarette, and took a long breath in, inhaling the comforting smoke. It was his way of de-stressing, really. A bad addiction, but with the way things were now-a-days, it was almost like the universe was feeding his addiction. The thought brought a slight smirk to his face, as he dragged the smoke into his lungs once again. He kept his mop of blonde locks down, his fringe covering his face. The day had not been a good one, and the last thing Eldwin wanted was to strike up a conversation with one of the locals. It would be extremely tiring, and all Eldwin wanted to do was reside in his warm armchair, and soak up the warmth of his fireplace, whilst sorting out his collection, of course. Although the German man knew that such wishes were naïve and childish, it did not stop him from believing that he had deserved it after a day like today. His bakery shift was slow, as the rations made it hard for anyone but the rich afford a simple loaf of bread. Which was why, as he was walking home with two brown bags filled with bakery goodies, he felt rather guilty for having such luxuries and wasting them. After all, he lived alone, and a human can only deal with so much bread at a time.

Eldwin flicked the butt of the cigarette off into the distance, having reached the end of it, and sighed, breathing out the rest of the toxic smog that filled his lungs. His foot caught on a broken part of pavement, and he stumbled, thankfully catching his balance in time, before he fell to the ground. Eldwin quickly scanned the area, making sure no-one had seen his little accident, and was startled by a dark figure not too far from his position. Scrambling to retain his posture and confidence, Eldwin brushed off his coat, and started to walk off, before remembering his bucket load of bread. The kinder side of him overtook Eldwin, and before he knew it, he was walking up to the unknown figure, and offering him the bag off loaves. Eldwin did not think of the possibilities or repercussions that could happen; he just wanted to help someone. After all, he didn't want to act like a spoilt fool who just wasted perfectly good food like that. "Would you like some loaves of bread?" he asked, tone cold and dull. He didn't want to come across as rude, but he couldn't help it. Deciding that it would be best not to explain and scare off the other, Eldwin gently placed the brown paper bag on the ground near the figure, and backed away, waiting to see if they would come and take his offer.


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Lancer
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Posted: Thu, 28/04/2016 00:45 (8 Years ago)
My art class assignment was "Humument", which is basically where you take any work of literature (songs, poems, books, etc.) and select words from it to make a new poem. You guys can try. This was mine:

"I'm not a mistake
Harder nights
But I don't care
Lose hate, somehow
Sink your doubts
Love your scars
Keep moving on"
Dragonsoul
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Posted: Thu, 28/04/2016 01:39 (8 Years ago)
Coo! I'll try that sometime.
Giltine13
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Posted: Thu, 28/04/2016 04:21 (8 Years ago)
@GOOM_LORD
I'm happy to see new faces in our clan! I didn't notice any errors in your form so you're accepted. Please don't forget to edit out the other part of your form. I'll tell Nessy to add you in the first post.
Ufimtsev
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Posted: Thu, 28/04/2016 05:18 (8 Years ago)
Oh, it sounds similar to blackout poetry? that's really neat! I really like the one you made. ;w; I started out in poetry and abstract short stories, aaaa I wanna get back into making those.

And welcome to the clan, goom_lord! :'D